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Old 08-15-2006   #1
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Critique #23 *Landscape*- 5 Participants

Welcome to this critique thread. Please read the purpose statement and the guidelines/ground rules regarding participation.

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The primary purpose of this thread is to provide a forum where photographers can give and receive constructive criticism on one another's photographs. By setting up some basic guidelines we hope that this thread will provide a forum where the give and take of honest constructive criticism can help us become better photographers.

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Old 08-15-2006   #3
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Bumpity, bump, we need one more since ampguy went awol.

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here is a better one
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NICO :

I like the forms and colors in this shot, I might say that there is too much black space, particularly on the bottom of the frame. You could possibly gain something from a slight exposure increase (could just be my monitor, but it seems a tad dim), and maybe bring out the differences between the hills a little more (in terms of brightness) to amplify the depth effect.

Honestly, I would crop and edit as shown in the attachment.

BUT, I kind of like the gem effect you get with all that black space and the nest of colors and light in the middle. . .
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Silva Lining :

I really like the mood of this shot. Very well put together compositionally as well.

I notice that the horizon is slightly tilted to the left. Perhaps this is intentional and adds to the melancholy of the shot.. . .

I would be likely to crop out the far left piece of land, but leave the little one to its right.

Other than that, this is a great image.
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Warren T. :

I like this. It seems you have the composition down very well. Maybe the subject is a little too far off, but I actually like it exactly as it is in that respect. Only thing I might do would be (something very artificial) to lower the saturation of all parts of the image except the person in the red coat. Just lower it enough that they really stand out.

Here is my creative edit - just playing with your image a little. It's good to share perspectives on editing for impact.
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Wayne, yours is pretty much perfect. I am a fan of light in images - lightning, fire, whatever. This is a very powerfully sparkling shot - and well framed with vignetting. Great avatar material.

I honestly can't think of any useful criticism. You might want to get rid of those scanning artifacts along the top 1/3 of the image. Sort of looks like something was showing through from the other side of the paper or something like that.
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I love this shot. I have been trying to capture something similiar everytime there has been a thunderstorm, but no luck yet. Obviously this was a long-ish exposure but no areas are burntout and the shot is balanced. My only improvement to make this shot better would be some cropping at the bottom and right hand side to remove what I presume are car headlights in the bottom right hand corner.

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I like the way this shot draws you in to it. The green of the foliage is very 'cold' but the red figure at the end of the patch grabs hold of you eyeball and pulls them down the track! A suggestion would be that it is slightly over exposed, but that would being fussy.

Nico
Great colours in this. The exposure is great in that there is still some detail in the contours of the hills rather than them being black. I would suggest cropping the shot at the bottom to remove some of the black and place the horizon off-centre.

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I love the colours in your shot and the patterns that the clouds make on the mountains in the background. I guess that the land in front of you was inclined although I wonder if you might be able to improve things by straightening the horizon - even artificially. The only other thing I would add is that a foreground object would be perfect, but thats just being picky
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Warren,

I like this type of shot very much. The pathway provides a leading line through the photo to your red figure. The trees and pathway lead to a vanishing point in the distance which is strengthened by the apparent small size of the red clothed person, which gives a sense of depth or distance.

My only suggestion would be in post processing the print to darken ("burn") the bright areas in the sky on the right side of the photo and the foreground to make the person "pop" out of the photo.

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I like this photo as I am a fan of wide open spaces. I love to watch cloud formations travel across the sky and observing the shadows as they roll across open prairie and desert landscapes.

I would suggest that you move your horizon either up to empahsize the foreground or down to emphasize the sky and cloud formations. I get a feeling of balance between the two in your photo as the horizon is almost dead center and I keep bouncing back an forth from foreground to sky trying to decide which you want to be your strong point.

Silva Lining,

I like this photo also, just wish I had some large bodies of water around here to photograph. I like the transition in grey tones through out the photo as they give a feeling of vastness to the photo. The edge of the sand where it meets the water, the horizon line where the water meets the sky, and the brighter sky in the top above the darker sky are all compositionally well placed. My eye is drawn into the photo. Can't think of anything I would add except maybe a pirate ship on the horizon.

nico,

Nice dramatic sunset, I like the reflection of the sunset in the lake. I would suggest moving your horizon line (the mountain range) either up or down so that it is in the upper or lower 1/3 of the photo. Actually I would move it down to remove a majority of the dark foreground, but then that is my individual taste. I can see where a massive dark foreground could lead you right to the sunset.

Thanks to all for the comments and for posting their photos.

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Wayne:
great shot, I like the dramatic sky and the thunderlighting is so powerful. Good colours indeed. I'm in a "pano period" so I can only suggest to crop it to the pano format and see what happens

Silva Lining:
The title fits the shot and the mood is the one I feel when I look at the photo. I like the tones and the composition; it seems to me (don't know if it's for my monitor) to be grainy but I like this effect. The only suggestion I may have is the same of the comment above, so I'd like to see this in a "pano" format cropping a little bit more the sand and the sky.

Warren,
I like woods but - usually - I don't like this kind of shots. Not in this case because the eye, runnig along the path, get the lady in the red coat.
I also like the contrast between her red dress and the green of the trees. Maybe she's a little bit too far, so I'd rather to see her nearer ("nearer" is it correct in english?)

Shutterflower:
i like it, the shadows of the clouds on the mountains in the background make the shot. i love the colours and the composition.
The only thing I would like to try is to crop the shot in order to have the horizon line in the lower third of the photo (with that dramatic sky it should work).

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Hi Guys,

Sorry for the delay .

Wayne:

Wow, great capture of the intensity and fury of a lightning stike. I like how the headlight steak frames the bright part of the image (clouds and lightning). It's very well exposed too.

I wouldn't change anything here.

Silva Lining

This shot has an different quality to it. It's dreamy and surreal. It has a "light" feeling to it with delicate details. Very nice!

I'm not sure what happened, but there seems to be some ghosting around the two land masses on the left of the image. It's a little disturbing to the eye.

Nico

You captured some classic colors and landscape patterns here. What a lovely scene .

The dust spots are a bit distracting though. Also, IMO, this works better for me as a horizontal. There seems to be too much black area on the bottom, and just a bit too much sky on top.

Shutterflower

A nice pattern of clouds and shadows on the hills. Interestingly, the tilted horizon give me a sense of motion I'm not sure if you intended that, but that's how I felt.

The colors seem just a bit flat, but maybe that's my monitor's problem. Also, I'm not sure why, but the hills in the background seem to be oversharpened which makes them appear to a but unreal. Was this a digital image?

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