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I will join you, Nico!
Raid
OK, I'm in. My first time :-)
Ian
shiro_kuro
10-30-2006, 13:02
I'm in too ; )
I'm in! ..................
Looks like we have five.
I'll go first. I don't remember exposure details for this one, sorry.
Ian
... attached mine too ...
shiro_kuro
11-01-2006, 04:28
Here is mine ...
M6
TMax 400
Hexanon m 50 f/2
Looks like we have five.
I'll go first. I don't remember exposure details for this one, sorry.
Ian
Ian: The photo is very good, and it could be even better if the holding hands could have been fully shown. I like it. My eyes are drawn to the arm of the man. Then I look for the hand of the woman.
Raid
Here my thoughts about the photos:
Ian (Iml):
interesting double (street?)
portrait.
I like the composition, there's a
strong line from the woman's
shoulder in the lower left corner to
the man's hand in the upper right
corner. They're both concentrate to
something happening out the picture
and this adds a bit of mistery to
the shot.
Light and details are right for my
taste.
The only suggestion I may have as
constructive criticism is about dof;
in fact i'd prefer to have the
background out of focus.
:)
Raid:
a great "fall" shot, I spent my last
weekend trying to shoot something
similar. I like the warm colours and
composition. Dof and light work well
for me. I would not change anything
in this one.
:)
Ampguy:
nice "winter" shot (it's the perfect
sequel after Raid's one!). I like
these almost "monochromatic"
landscape; a strong mood, this lack
of colours tells a lot about how
much boring may winter be. The only
thing i'd change is the framing
because i find the house on the left
a bit distracting.
:)
Shiro Kuro
I like this shot; it seems a
difficult light situation (dim in
foreground and sunny in the
background) that you well managed
with the exposure and also choosing
a short dof. I like composition, the
path makes me wonder about where it
ends...it's intriguing. this shot -
imho - it's a sort of "take it or
leave it" and i'd take it "as is".
:)
Ciao,
nico
P.s. sorry for this weird format but i did copy/paste from a .txt file .... N.
attached
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ampguy: The image is monochromatic, so I tried removing all colors with greyscale. Is this originally a color photo or was it taken with a C-41 B&W film? As for the image itself, this is a nice photo of a scene with snow. There is a house showing in the left corner fo the image. I wonder how this image would have looked like if you had slightly shifted towards the left, showing more of the house and less of the telephone/power lines on the right. I like it.
Raid
... attached mine too ...
Nico: This is an interesting play of shadows. I like it. Maybe you could slightly reduce the high contrast.
Raid
Here is mine ...
M6
TMax 400
Hexanon m 50 f/2
shiro-kuro: I like it! Unlike the same approach used with the fishing dock in an earlier critique session, this one is better suited for your approach. The photo has perceived immense depth from the foreground and to the dreamy looking background.
Raid
raid: Really nice shot, beautiful autumn colours, good composition placing the shack centrally, leads the eye across the carpet of leaves on the ground towards it. A wider lens may have been worth trying if possible, to get more of the tops of the two main trees, especially the one on the right.
Ian
ampguy: Again, a nice shot, I like the muted colour palette and think it works well in colour rather than b&w, the desaturated tones give it a good chilly feel. I would crop to get rid of the house on the left.
Ian
nico: Strong geometry, and I like the feeling of movement, and the crenellated pattern on the shadow from the roof (?). Good shot. I would probably crop it a little bit tighter.
Ian
shiro_kuro: I like this a lot, simple but effective. Good contrast and textures, and, again, strong geometry draws the eye. I think I'd very slightly prefer focus to be on the foreground bit of the wall rather than mid-frame, or perhaps the camera raised fractionally to make the immediate foreground of the wall slightly less prominent.
Ian
Ian - I like this a lot, it's good use of b&w using extensive latitude of exposure, and caputuring the couple realistic concerned expressions. I wonder how it would have looked if the background were more out of focus.
Raid - Vermont Fall, I like the feeling of being buried in fallen Fall leaves. The colors and feeling seems so short as I'm trying to shoot as much fall colors myself right now. Great deep depth of field and an interesting house or shed hidden by more trees. Very nice.
Nico - very mysterious but I think it's children playing with balls on a dirt street in sandals. Nice shadows in what was probably very bright light.
shiro_kuro - Looks like a walking trail very close to the edge of a river. The river below and to the left appears alive and ready to engulf you, while the trail on the right is tranquil.
... attached mine too ...
I wonder if my adjusted image of Nico's is making the contrast look better or not. I hope that Nico is not upset about this suggested adjustment.
Raid
hey Raid :)
i'm absolutely not upset but grateful indeed: you spent your time adjusting a photo of mine.
It's a photo I shoot in the early afternoon in Portugal with the sun still high and strong light. I choose this extreme contrast because i did want to tell the story of 2 kids playing (ampguy, you're right!:)) only with their shadows, feet and bowls with less details possible, but I can understand that it may appear as too much contrasty...
When i scanned this one i tried different cropping and a tighter crop seems to me to force the shadows in a too small place to be confartable playing bowls ... but this is just a beginner's opinion...
anyway, thanks for the comments and the adjustment guys, i really appreciate :).
I'd also like to read Shiro Kuro's opinions on all the shots, hope he will post his critiques.
Ciao
Nico
This was actually captured in color, but might have been better taken in b&w. I like your conversion a lot, I'm not sure if I like it more than the original, but I like both a lot.
This is a scene across the street from our house, it's a lot between two streets where normally about 4 or 6 houses would be, but this land is owned by the regional power company. To the right of the scene is a small fenced off mini power grid, and as ca be seen, houses are on the left.
Until about last year, every year in the winter, and sometimes spring, we would see families (4-5) of white-tailed deer coming to nibble on the trees, I have quite a few photos of these deer from my 12x zoom camera. However, starting last year, we didn't see them, possibly because of increased building activity going on in the area, keeping the deer further away from us.
ampguy: The image is monochromatic, so I tried removing all colors with greyscale. Is this originally a color photo or was it taken with a C-41 B&W film? As for the image itself, this is a nice photo of a scene with snow. There is a house showing in the left corner fo the image. I wonder how this image would have looked like if you had slightly shifted towards the left, showing more of the house and less of the telephone/power lines on the right. I like it.
Raid
Until about last year, every year in the winter, and sometimes spring, we would see families (4-5) of white-tailed deer coming to nibble on the trees, I have quite a few photos of these deer from my 12x zoom camera. However, starting last year, we didn't see them, possibly because of increased building activity going on in the area, keeping the deer further away from us.
I'd like to see some of those shots (i love wild animals) would you mind to post some pics in this thread? thanks.
I would be pleased to, but it might take me time to find them, I'm motivated now though, as they might be good stock photographs.
I'd like to see some of those shots (i love wild animals) would you mind to post some pics in this thread? thanks.
Nico: I don't know if you consider birds as "wildlife", but here are a a few photos of birds:
http://www.photo.net/photodb/folder?folder_id=647873
Raid
Thanks for the link Raid,
a lot of beatiful photos there (the nature serie is great).
ciao
Nico
Thanks, Niko. It used to be my favorite photography topic in the past. I even bought books on birds to better identify the birds photographed.
Raid
Come on shiro_kuro, where are you :-)
Thanks for the comments. Agree re. DOF, my excuse is it was shot very quickly with no chance of a retake (a street shot within a few feet of the couple). I like it because of the expression on the woman's face, I have no idea what was going through her mind but I thought she looked really interesting.
Nice bird shots raid.
Ian
shiro_kuro
11-03-2006, 03:02
Ian -I agree I think the cut hand takes away from this shot..... I also think if you stepped to the right and back just a bit . I would like to see more of the mans face at a slightly different angle and have more space in the direction he is looking ... as it is there is not enough room ....my eye goes in the direction he is looking and just stops at the edge of the frame ...... I really like her intense gaze - you captured this moment well and the tones look great
Charley
shiro_kuro
11-03-2006, 03:11
Raid - I miss New England in the fall ... Great colors and I really like the depth ...It seems you are pretty low to the ground ??? I like this perspective .The ground is so full of leaves drawing your eye straight back to the large barren tree in the background ....Hopefully I get a chance to take some shots like this next week ..Japan has a really beautiful fall also ...
Charley
shiro_kuro
11-03-2006, 03:21
ampguy .... Your photograph really makes me feel cold ...I also agree on the point about the telephone pole ---- I would rather see the house or neither and just a shot of the trees .... are you actually outside taking this photograph or inside ? I am not sure if there is a reflection I see or if that is snow whipping through the air ... Thanks for sharing I get a glimpse of what I am soon in for .......summer is over ....
Charley
shiro_kuro
11-03-2006, 03:49
Nico- Great shot -- I like this composition very much --- maybe a little more detail in the shadows ... the interaction between the shadow and light was well seen --- the white foot and the players hand not touching --- what do you think ? My feeling is the composition is so balanced with balls and feet and hands that a separation there would of been nice...... Here is my version of your Photo .... Just a little dodge and burn and some tonal changes ...hope you don't mind..might not even be noticeable :)
Charley
My photo was taken ten days after the peak of fall colors, and I had to drive around to find any remaining leaves left on trees. I saw this one place suddenly as I was on the Interstate, and I pulled over to capture some fall colors photos.
Here, I used a 24mm lens vertically and I placed the tripod at minimum height and close to ground level. Film used was the old Fujichrome 50 (not Velvia) with a polarizing filter. I recall checking depth of filed setting to make sure that the foreground was sharp and that the background also was OK.
Charley: Where in Japan do you live? I stayed in Nagoya for six weeks two years ago.
Thanks for all comments. I enjoyed the discussions.
Raid
Charlie,
thanks for the comment, I agree with about separation, it would have been better to have the foot and the hand separated, I also like your adjustments, thanks :).
Where did you shoot yours?
Bye
Nico
Autumn/Fall has arrived very late in the south of England this year. It's really only just starting. I'm hoping to get some nice autumn colours photographed this weekend.
Ian
shiro_kuro
11-05-2006, 02:07
Nico I shot that photograph in a place called SanDanKyo -- a three level water fall ... very beautiful spot and very old ..the trees look ancient ....in fact I just went there today to try and catch some leaves changing color only trouble was I had a half a roll of color film left in my camera and three boxes of Black and white in my bag : )
Raid I live in Hiroshima near a place called Miyajima ...been here for about a year ... next week I will give it another try catching the leaves change ....
Charley
Hey Charley
I know Miyajima, beautiful place. I spent a month travelling around Japan last March and spent a day walking around Miyajima, it was great.
Some of my Hiroshima and Miyajima pictures (http://www.adweb.co.uk/ian/photography/japan/indexp5.html)
Ian
Is Miyajima the island with lots of deer running around?
Raid
Yep, that's the place.
Ian
shiro_kuro
11-06-2006, 00:58
Is Miyajima the island with lots of deer running around?
Raid
lol yes that is the place :)
Ian nice japan pics .... I like your Osaka set ..thanx for sharing
I also have visited Miyajima. Of course, I visited Hiroshima while visiting Japan.
Raid
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